GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
Will review shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
Prelim[edit]
- No edit wars
- No duplicated links (bar postnom)
- Images correctly licensed
- Earwig reports copyvio unlikely
Lede and infobox[edit]
- Link sortie
- Link dogfight
- Could mention in the lede that he later flies Spitfires, right now it suggests that he only flew Hurricanes
- Don't believe nicknames need to be italicized
- Operation Dynamo could be added to the infobox, being separate to the BoB
- His service number (in LGs etc) can be added to infobox
Early life[edit]
- Link law clerk
- Barrister and solicitor are different roles, why do they have the same link?
- Link Wellington
- Why was his acceptance provisional?
- You link the "civilian flying school" to RAF Prestwick which doesn't immediately make sense
- You've left the "RAF" before Uxbridge, which I think is against your usual practice
- "More advanced flying training followed" Why not include location(s) for this training too?
Second World War[edit]
- Link Second World War
- "The squadron was based at Scapa Flow" I was a little confused when reading this (aren't they at Acklington?); suggest rewording sentence to begin with the date of move
- Link Royal Navy
- "the following month it was back at Tangmere" The article does not make it obvious that the squadron had moved away from Tangmere in this period, which is what I assume this means
- Suggest adding an actual mention of the Battle of Britain to main text
- Not clear what "a section" would be - is this a flight?
- Possibly useful to link bailed out
- Link perspex
- Did North see any operational flying with 96 Sqn?
- Probably but the sources don't explicitly say. I've add mention of a course that he attended during his time there.
- Link acting
- Link sorties
- Practice suggests you should add what bombers he was escorting, if possible
- Is Marquise this Marquise?
- Could be useful to expand on the tally uncertainty - which kills are the dodgy ones?
References[edit]
- References look good.
@Zawed: Hi, that's my initial run through completed. Will await replies. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 09:40, 2 October 2022 (UTC)
- @Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, thanks for the detailed review. I have responded to your various points above, and this is ready for you to take another look. Thanks again, Zawed (talk) 09:23, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
- @Zawed: Looks good. My only quibble is that the service number needs a reference. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 17:12, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
- Done, I added mention of it in the main body rather than cite it only in the infobox. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 4 October 2022 (UTC)
- Happy to pass this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:03, 4 October 2022 (UTC)
- Done, I added mention of it in the main body rather than cite it only in the infobox. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 4 October 2022 (UTC)
- @Zawed: Looks good. My only quibble is that the service number needs a reference. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 17:12, 3 October 2022 (UTC)