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{{*mp}}... that Norwegian [[skiing]] pioneers '''[[Fritz R. Huitfeldt]]''' and '''[[Karl Roll]]''' were both active members of the exclusive ski club '''[[SK Ull|Ull]]''' ''(deity [[Ullr]] pictured)''? |
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:::* '''ALT''' ... that Norwegian [[skiing]] pioneers '''[[Fritz R. Huitfeldt]]''' and '''[[Karl Roll]]''' were both active members of the exclusive ski club '''[[SK Ull|Ull]]''', named after the Norse deity [[Ullr]] ''(pictured)''? --[[User:Orlady|Orlady]] ([[User talk:Orlady|talk]]) 19:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC) |
:::* '''ALT''' ... that Norwegian [[skiing]] pioneers '''[[Fritz R. Huitfeldt]]''' and '''[[Karl Roll]]''' were both active members of the exclusive ski club '''[[SK Ull|Ull]]''', named after the Norse deity [[Ullr]] ''(pictured)''? --[[User:Orlady|Orlady]] ([[User talk:Orlady|talk]]) 19:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC) |
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::::*Definitely an improvement Orlady, I suppose that I should give that a tick as well [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]], to avoid confusion.[[User:Mikenorton|Mikenorton]] ([[User talk:Mikenorton|talk]]) 19:42, 6 December 2011 (UTC) |
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Revision as of 19:42, 6 December 2011
SK Ull, Karl Roll, Fritz R. Huitfeldt
... that Norwegian skiing pioneers Fritz R. Huitfeldt and Karl Roll were both active members of the exclusive ski club Ull (deity Ullr pictured)?
Created by Geschichte (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 23:05, 22 November 2011 (UTC)
The articles for the two club members are new enough and long enough and well cited. There is no evidence of plagiarism/copyvio problems in the online references in either article. The hook is I suppose interesting enough (I wanted to know why a ski-club was called 'wool' although that's not the translation I now realise). It's correctly cited in the articles and the sources for the hook fact are fine.
Regarding the SK Ull article, length date and sourcing are fine and AGF for plagiarism/copyvio for offline sources, just one question. In the lead it says "it attracted several professed sportsmen", although I doubt that it was intended to suggest that they weren't 'real' sportsmen as the word 'professed' implies. It says elsewhere that the many of the members were professionals, so perhaps that was the intent. I know that they weren't 'professional sportsmen', can you think of an alternative? Mikenorton (talk) 00:00, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I did not write the article SK Ull, only dyk nominator. Anyway, I removed the word "professed" from lead, as it appears ambigious. In Norse mythology Ull was a god for hunting and competition, superior with his skis and his bow. Added a note on this to the article, and included a drawing of Ullr with skis. Oceanh (talk) 01:40, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks, it's OK now and I like the picture, status of that is fine as well. Mikenorton (talk) 09:16, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
- If the picture is used, IMO the hook should mention why it's relevant:
- ALT ... that Norwegian skiing pioneers Fritz R. Huitfeldt and Karl Roll were both active members of the exclusive ski club Ull, named after the Norse deity Ullr (pictured)? --Orlady (talk) 19:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
- Definitely an improvement Orlady, I suppose that I should give that a tick as well , to avoid confusion.Mikenorton (talk) 19:42, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
- Definitely an improvement Orlady, I suppose that I should give that a tick as well
