GA Review
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Nominator: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:49, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 03:18, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
Will pick this up.--ZKang123 (talk) 03:18, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
Images
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Copyedits
[edit]- Earwig don't show any close paraphrasing issues.
Lead
[edit]- programming from National Educational Television, forerunner to PBS. –
programming from National Educational Television–the forerunner to PBS.
- Might spell-out what UHF means at the start, although that wikilink seems to suffice
- ; a major step forward for the station was its 1968 telecast of a highly anticipated football game between Ohio State and Michigan, leading many to go out and buy all-channel television sets or converters. – Might separate from the previous clause and rewrite:
The station drew more audiences with its 1968 telecast of a highly anticipated football game between Ohio State and Michigan, as many went out to buy all-channel television sets or converters.
History
[edit]- What was channel 12? Like, the OSU wanted to use channel 12 for their educational television channel? Might say
to move channel 12 to Columbus so that the OSU could use it as an educational channel...
- The lack of a VHF mention kinda hurts things here. Fix.
- Might wikilink the first instance of Columbus in the body
- needing to start over –
requiring to start over
- I think the "with" after that is redundant.
- Probably not in American English
- You sure love your semi-colons, but for the next sentence beginning with "The application was nearly ready by January 1953", it's better to split further because they aren't completely related. It's really going for very long.
- By 1958, WOSU-TV operated for about 30 hours a week, nearly half – and here a semi-colon would be appropriate. And later
nearly half of that output consisted of..
- to take notice of channel 34 – could be shortened to
to notice channel 34
- In 1955, George E. Condon of the Cleveland Plain Dealer asked... He remarked – I suppose for the former question it was more of a rhetorical question he was asking himself in the article? Trying to read the text, although it's rather small
- Yes
- received federal funding to help acquire – "help" is a bit redundant.
- Not when it does not cover the whole cost of the project and equipment.
- during a time when it appeared the Nixon administration would reduce public broadcasting funding – If I recall the administration eventually did that? Though I think this is a rabbit hole of research
- What does a "programming effort" mean?
- Reworded
- After negative attention around irregularities with the 1986 edition of the station's auction, leading station representatives to admit they had placed bids on slow-moving auction items in hopes of getting them to sell, president Edward H. Jennings ordered internal and external reviews of the station. – I suggest splitting this sentence
- leaked to The Lantern, Ohio State's student newspaper, and the Cleveland Plain Dealer – use em-dash
- For that quote it still requires an attribution at the end of it.
- Sourcing a blockquote to a ref in the last prose paragraph is an accepted practice per {{blockquote}}
- were placed under the College of Social and Behavioral Sciences, the OSU academic unit that included programs in journalism and communication. – also use em-dash
- mentioned possibly eliminating –
mentioned the possibility of...
- under the prodding of OSU dean Randall Ripley – maybe "under the urging" would be a better term?
- CsurisVision, a documentary on computer artist Chuck Csuri,... – again consider an em-dash
No other issues concerning the copyedits.--ZKang123 (talk) 10:43, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
Sourcing and sport checks
[edit]Sources used are generally by local or regional newspapers, which are reliable in covering the article subject.
- For some references linking to genealogybank.com, I recommend adding the via parameter as you've done for the newspaper.com links, although it's not necessary at the GAN stage.
- Ref 42: title use en or em-dash
- Refs 2, 3, 55, 60 check out
- Ref 70 is dead. Trying to access archived versions but they are not working for now.
- It is available to me via NewsBank. The Columbus Dispatch broke lots of old news links somewhat recently, and not many of them got archived for some reason.
- Ref 78 is also dead. The archived version checks out.
That's all for me. Putting article on hold.--ZKang123 (talk) 10:43, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- @ZKang123: Items addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 00:13, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
- Everything else is in order. Passed.--ZKang123 (talk) 00:33, 31 July 2024 (UTC)